One foot in front of the other,
There is no turning back now.
I've come this far and lost my sense of time, honestly; the
Righteous path of decency.
She came and went and came right back.
I'm a sucker for despair and apologies, I swear.
She hurt me once, she'll hurt me again
Life is a
Continuous lesson, even when your dead.
Am I
Stubborn? weak?
As I take my next step forward I speak
Inside my head as dreams of honest women remain a mirage I cannot make
Reality.
She came and went and came right back.
I'm a sucker for despair and apologies; too kind
And forgiving.This
Life is too damn short. But not short enough for me to be the one
To pull the plug this time.You'll See...
I like this a lot. At first, I was a tad bit confused (that's me for ya) but once I read it again, I completely understood what you were trying to express.
ReplyDeletePS. Stubborn?: Sometimes ;) Weak?: Not at all honey! <3
Very interesting post. And just as a (little) nudge of criticism, I think your post would work nicely if you put the photo as centered instead of to the side. Then the text could just flow together under the photo. :) I dunno, just my thought.
ReplyDeleteAnd thanks for your comment! Will definitely follow. :)
I like the poem. My only criticism is that the lines are a bit confusing. If they followed the cadence of the piece it would be a lot easier to follow, and it would flow smoother.
ReplyDeleteFor instance:
Life is a
Continuous ...
Why not put them on the same line?
PS: I removed the Short Story post because I re-edited it and then sent it to a magazine for publication. If it doesn't get republished then I will repost it.
this better? :)
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