Tuesday, July 28, 2009

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She is like a dandelion on the edge of a cliff
Next to the sea.
The wind-encouraged rapture brings her to her knees as she’s taken
From the rocks into the deadly blue sea.
(She is stronger than she thinks,
I know, that’s why she left me.)

Before the endpoint, the gusting breeze
Meets its end,
So the dandelion plummets into the sandy beach instead.
(No matter what brings her down, she shall always stand up.
It’s the way she is; the dandelion is tough.)

So comfortable now, her stem is stuck
In this thick warm surface,
The tide seems to be interested in this dandelion’s purpose.
(I tried to suck her into me with my love.
She didn’t give me a chance because
I wasn’t enough.)

The tide erupts upon the scene within the lively flower’s green,
And yanks it from the sand to bring her colors to the sea.
(He stole her from me,
she accepted his hand
There was no chance for me)
To the ocean, the flower seemed different from the others;
The dandelion seemed to be tougher.
She has always been strong, my little dandelion,
Even from day one,
(But like I said, I wasn’t good enough)
Nothing could destroy her pride, nothing could be done.
(She told me nothing of her
feelings and left my concerns in the dark)
She brought her roots down within the oceans depths,
And sucked the sea dry until there was nothing left.
And then came the rain.
(She left the door open on the way out,
I was so shattered,
I couldn’t even cry.)

4 comments:

  1. I totally dig this one. Very nice. But, PS, that Shelfari thing way gets in the way and I can't really see what I'm typing. Haha.

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  2. Nice one, dude. Good to see other "aspiring"s on the blog.
    I've got a short poem on mine. Check it out:

    http://acerjay-bigblogger.blogspot.com/

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  3. Very lyrical, with a solid metaphorical tongue. You remind me maybe of a Coleridge. I like the experimental meter, and the near-synchysis effect in the verse. Very appreciable story, too. Ever tried prose? If you ran this all into one paragraph it'd make a pleasant simulacrum of a Henry Miller manuscript.

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  4. Amazing work Chris! I really enjoyed reading this one! Like Marc said, "Very lyrical, with a solid metaphorical tongue." I couldn't agree more!

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